My Music

I'm train to become a rapper listen to my songs andgive me some feed back and tips to improve my self please and if have a myspace add to your playlist .

http://www.myspace.com/youngfellayadmine

i'll be blunt, the quality was fairy bad, i recomend using a blanket or a sock ober the mike incase you just put your mouth too close, if that doesnt help you may need a better mike.
im not into rap so i cant say anything about your vocals, but the beat was just 4 and a half minutes of hell to me, you need to add more then the basic beats, or it'll make your vocals sound bad, even if they could be good.

But again, all this has to do with your system, because i dont realy like rap.

ok I lower my sound on the mic

I liked it. The beat was sick and you were fairly good. I rap a little myself but I never made a song or anything

Thanks you I just finished a song today

that didnt help.
so you keep your mouth close to the mike? if so use the sock over it to make the quality better.

if thats not the issue, i'd say it may be the system your recording it on.

Rappers= Lawless band of thugs who have nothign to do with their time then turn poetry into A series of Words Used in a fashion created by african americans, Truth is....Rap fails. (Not rascist Cause I'm African American

well i personally dislike every rap i've ever heard, so i agree, although to post that you donbt like it without giving andy advise to something is more trolling(as it may start a fight.)

personally i think of rap like this,
R - retards
A - attempting
P - poetry

But i did give advise on how he may be able to make it better for the people how would like it.
(again, its my personal thought that my and my friends use because its funny, dont start a fight.)

should there be a message too?
or is this about the fact i have a b in don't and a y in and... because in truth i don't know why either.